demos

Aristides Gomez Ramírez's Portfolio- I  enjoyed how he presented his charater design. Not only did you get to see the character alone in a walk cycle but you also get to see them in their environment through a short scene.  But, it was a bit long and didnt seem to have a strong beginning middle and end.  I liked how he included a key (program used, title, date made) for each part.  He also included contact information in the demo.  
http://www.behance.net/gallery/Demo-Reel-2009/346811

Barbara Domuschieva's Portfolio- She gives character development, characters in action, a beginning middle and end, and gives contact information and a key for the parts of the reel. Her page has the reel, stills, a link to her portfolio, and links to other work. 
http://www.behance.net/gallery/Animation-Demo-Reel/1957119 

Fei Gao's - I really liked how she put her demo together it showed a range of work but still had a beginning, middle, and end. The music wasnt distracting and the reel wasnt too long. 
http://www.behance.net/gallery/Demo-Reel-2011/1348765

new maiden

all together

a little different story but basically the same

a girl  uses a creatures skill of bringing things back to life to become queen

but her lie unveiled and the creature gets the credit and she is banished from the kingdom

In a  kingdom whos crops are dying a king tries to find a way for prosper by asking the people of his land 

A maiden tells the king she can make the land prosper -she can bring it back to life

He says if she can shell be queen

In a field the girl makes a deal with a  creature she's captured to turn the crops from dead to alive (it bounces through the crops -connected to the maidens leash)

- shell promises to let him go once shes queen. 

 at the wedding the king wants to show the land how she made the kingdom prosper- this time in front of everyone- a dead rose

She says she can only do the kings crops- he brings in wheat as he turns her hands go in her pockets

with no way out she slips the creature in her hands and goes to put her hands on the wheat

as she does this the creature slips and dangles by the leash she has it on 

the king picks up the creature and by doing this the wheat is touched and brought back to life

the king sees the maiden for the fraud she is and banishes her from the kingdom

he then presents the creature to the kingdom as their savior  

script and thumbnails/breakdown

1-    scroll explaining challenge set by king

2- throne room maiden and king talking

a-throne room

b-king face

c-maiden face

3- at Field, maiden makes deal with jub jub, jub heals field

a-field 

b-jub jub in hands

 c- maiden face

d- field healing

4- throne room-wedding- rose, then wheat, jub falls king grabs it wheat heals- all hail jub jub

a-    throne room maiden and king and rose

b-     a- King presents rose to maiden 

       b-King presents wheat

c-     c- hands over wheat jub falls out of hands follow leash

d-     d- hand with wheat picks up jub/ wheat back to life

e-    e- angry face king

f-     f- maiden banished

g-    g- king hand holding jub

SCRIPT

opens with a scroll title card

By order of the King: Anyone who can bring prosper to our dieing land will be rewarded beyond measure.

Kings throne

A maiden is in front of the king at his throne.

view of Maiden 

MAIDEN- Your majesty, I can bring prosper to our lands, as I can bring them back to life.

 view of king

KING- I will give you a dead field and if you can bring it to life I shall make you queen.

Dead Field

The maiden is standing in a dead wheat field she brings something out of her pocket.

hands holding bound Jub Jub

JUB JUB- please let me go

Maidens face

MAIDEN- I shall let you go Jub Jub if you bring back to life the plants of the kingdom, and once Im queen I will let you go.

Dead Field

The maiden lets the Jub Jub out of her hands holding it by a leash. The Jub Jub bounces through the field and the once dead wheat turns golden and full of life.

Kings Throne-marriage of maiden and king

King standing at throne with dead rose. Maiden is standing across from him.

KING-This fair maiden has saved our kingdom by bringing back to life our dead crops. Before we marry let her bring back to life this dead rose so no one will question this marriage.

MAIDEN- I would gladley bring this back to life if I could but I can only bring back your kingdoms crops.

KING-Then I shall bring you some wheat

The king turns, recieves dead wheat and presents it to the maiden

the maiden holds out her hands pretending to work magic but as her hands move the Jub Jub falls from her hands dangling on its leash.

The king takes hold of the Jub Jub and as he does the Jub Jub touches the wheat bringing it back to life

KING- You lie! It wasnt you who brought the wheat back to life. You are banished from the kingdom and are to never return.

the maiden exits the screen hunched over in failure

the king presents the jub jub to the kingdom

KING- Here is our savior, we shall forever be in debt to Jub Jub

characters and settings

new take

a different take on the tale of rumpelstiltskin 

lies and Greed gets you no where

a girl captures a creature to use his skills to become queen

but her lie is becomes known and the creature gets the credit instead. 

In a poor run down kingdom

A girl sees a creature turn dead crops to living crops she captures him. If you do this for me I will let you go.

She tells the king she can do this task

He says if she can shell be queen

In a field the girl has the creature turn the crops from dead to alive

But when he was done she didn’t let him go – for he would give her a source of riches always

To the kings promise she was to be queen but upon there wedding the king wanted to show the land how she made there kingdom prosper- this time in front of everyone a dead potted flower

She couldn’t give it life without the creature –she was reveled as a fraud, and had to give the credit to the creature

The woman was out casted from the kingdom and the creature was rejoiced as the savior of the lands  

I stil want them to look some thing like